INTERNATIONAL DIALOGUE_"MSAFIH AND AJAKAYE'S LOVE STORY."

The rose of my beauty,

always ready to clean my tears 

when tears and sorrow surround my tears,

no matter how others build charity

for my heart, you and I will be in unity.

My perfect man,

the man who chased all raven birds around me,

the black man with white palms and deeds,

your bravery in love has nurtured

my heart to be a modern prisoner all over again.

I enjoy our affection as honey in tea,

and I never knew I can be free

to love again, closing my eyes in your sea

of compassion over my past, Giant of Idols will see

us through, and I hope you don't kill

me when ideas or skill

assumes me too busy to offer your night pill.

See all these rhymes,

be careful... Poetry is not mere rhymes,

emotions are critical from a hole,

deep deep... If you dig into my soul.

You will find out,

maybe you will be surprised, or maybe shout

that I am in love with a Kenya man,

one of my joys of being a woman.

Neither do Mountains move nor meet,

we humans walk and mingle,

thus why she takes me out...

Of singleness,

she is my weakness

but her love still makes me stronger.

No man is perfect

but I believe there is one...

One perfect woman in Mother STRIDA.

One perfect one,

from the land of igwes,

and she be madamoo

Ada...

The one in love.

If charms exit in Nigeria,

then her love has charmed me.

I thought we were just doing art

but art melted our hearts

into love that cures,

she has my remedy

and I got her pills.

If death comes to terminate love,

then let's die together

for I can't wait to leave you alone.

If life after death is real,

then we will love each other when the sun stops rising

from the final set

but Rmtge Galaxy will remain to shine to our perfection

and romantic prescription.

That I can't do without you...

You too, you dare not live without me.

Adam got her perfect human,

yes and the universe is witnessing

to this African garden of Eden,

as I write the story of my perfect woman.

AJAKAYE RASHIDAT OLAMIDAYO

STRIDA_Striking Ideas.

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ARTYST MSAFIH POETICS INKS

10th of May, 2021.

COMMENTARIES_

REVEREND ADEYINKA SAMUEL:

What a write-up. Keep it up, while looking-up, brace-up, and also buckle-up, for you to rise-up, for you to chop-up you need a divine back-up and fire-up for a  lift-up.

But of all the "whales" and "sharks" of the deep and shallow ocean cave of our fatherland, sabotagingly STRIDA's fishing hook caught none except in Faraway Kenya.  

Gbam!!!

SHOLA TOFUNMI:(Chemistry in Lagos State University)

Wow! What a nice poetic work. There are  two interpretations of this poem.

(1) The obvious 

(2) The personal ( of which as you have rightly said can only be accurately know if one can see the deep hole in your soul)

Keep on your good work . Truly writing has called you.

SUZAN:

Is the third stanza part of the poem? In my opinion, that stanza seems to stand out in your poem. I feel like it shouldn't be a part of the poem. It is another poem on it's own if well refined. 

Aside that, your poem is beautiful. I totally understand your point. However, I believe that when writing poetry, there should be an ounce of mystery in it. It is left to your audience to decide whether you are writing about yourself or not. Poetry is about twisting words to your own taste. You may write a poem about an accident you withnessed some months yet you could make it seem like you were a victim of the accident.

Also,I believe the third stanza of your poem is stating the obvious. Your poem already shows that besides the rhymes, your poem holds more information, emotion and passion. I don't think you need to state that in your poem. 

But, you could actually rewrite that stanza to flow with your poem by refurbishing it.